Post by datguy on May 19, 2010 21:11:14 GMT -5
Another supposed descendant of Cluny the Scourge 
, Zitch was teased, picked on, and beat by other vermin where he came from, Rag Casim, because of his deformaty. Zitch Daggerjaw wasn't called Daggerjaw for just any reason. Zitch's teeth were longer than a dagger...ya. One dreary night, Zitch snapped... In an insane rampage, Zitch roped every vermin in Rag Casim (made up place) while they slumbered. As Zitch set about slicing them into as many pieces as possible he could'nt hear the eerie voices that went on inside his mind. Zitch came out of that cave with blood caked in his paws and a maniacl grin on his face. What he did that night tourmented him forever. Growing strong, both physicaly and mentallyish... He set out for a place called Mossflower Woods. Every night he could hear screaching, and whispering in his head. Zitch Daggerclaw was skitsofrenic. In his trek towards Mossflower, Zitch gathered a small band of 258 vermin. From time to time he would kill any vermin that failed him to keep his band loyal. The day Zitch and his band reached Mossflower, Zitch was a cold-blooded killer, just like his supposed ancester Cluny. Prone to extreme mood-swings, Zitch wont take no for an answer. Wielding a large two-handed mace he calls Blooddrinker. He often holds whispered conferences with it. Even though he is physcologicaly weak, Zitch Daggerclaw is an excellent schemer and planner. He plans to lay siege to Redwall Abbey in the future.
Any feedback? Anything I should add? Thanks for your time.
, Zitch was teased, picked on, and beat by other vermin where he came from, Rag Casim, because of his deformaty. Zitch Daggerjaw wasn't called Daggerjaw for just any reason. Zitch's teeth were longer than a dagger...ya. One dreary night, Zitch snapped... In an insane rampage, Zitch roped every vermin in Rag Casim (made up place) while they slumbered. As Zitch set about slicing them into as many pieces as possible he could'nt hear the eerie voices that went on inside his mind. Zitch came out of that cave with blood caked in his paws and a maniacl grin on his face. What he did that night tourmented him forever. Growing strong, both physicaly and mentallyish... He set out for a place called Mossflower Woods. Every night he could hear screaching, and whispering in his head. Zitch Daggerclaw was skitsofrenic. In his trek towards Mossflower, Zitch gathered a small band of 258 vermin. From time to time he would kill any vermin that failed him to keep his band loyal. The day Zitch and his band reached Mossflower, Zitch was a cold-blooded killer, just like his supposed ancester Cluny. Prone to extreme mood-swings, Zitch wont take no for an answer. Wielding a large two-handed mace he calls Blooddrinker. He often holds whispered conferences with it. Even though he is physcologicaly weak, Zitch Daggerclaw is an excellent schemer and planner. He plans to lay siege to Redwall Abbey in the future.Any feedback? Anything I should add? Thanks for your time.
it probably make them run away 
Maybe dagger teeth or something like that.